Homework 9.15
학생이 쓴 원문
Should there be a dress code in places such as school, restaurants, and places of business? Why or why not?
: I think there is no need to set a dress code in places. Because wearing what they want is their right. But In formal places, It is okay to set a dress color to make more tidy.
Wearing clothes what they want is a way to express their personality. So I think prescribing a dress code rule strictly is not a good way!
강사 첨삭
1. I think there is no need to set a dress code in places.
>>I think there is no need to set a dress code in general places.
2. Because wearing what they want is their right.
>>CORRECT
OR>>Because it is their right to wear whatever they want to wear.
3. But In formal places, It is okay to set a dress color to make more tidy.
>>But in formal places, it is okay to set a dress color to make it tidier.
4. Wearing clothes what they want is a way to express their personality.
>>Wearing clothes that they want is a way to express their personality.
5. So I think prescribing a dress code rule strictly is not a good way!
>>So I think strictly prescribing a dress code rule is not good!
Very good, Michelle!
- T. Melody ^^
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