Homework(9/15)
학생이 쓴 원문
Last year, I saw the movie ‘Aladdin’ which was the live-action version.
The movie was very impressive and I envied Aladdin because of his magic carpet.
It enabled the main characters to go everywhere.
If I could fly whenever I wanted, I want to go all around the world.
Especially, when I am exhausted and tired, It gives me a great refreshment.
Also, when I want to see great musical and music show abroad, It is easy to go there.
How wonderful it is!
강사 첨삭
1. Last year, I saw the movie ‘Aladdin’ which was the live-action version.
>>CORRECT
OR>>I watched the live-action movie version of \'Aladdin\' last year.
5. Especially, when I am exhausted and tired, It gives me a great refreshment.
2. The movie was very impressive and I envied Aladdin because of his magic carpet.
>>CORRECT
OR>>The movie was very splendid and I envied Aladdin because of his magic carpet.
3. It enabled the main characters to go everywhere.
>>CORRECT
OR>>It enabled him to go wherever he wanted to go.
4. If I could fly whenever I wanted, I want to go all around the world.
>>CORRECT
OR>>If I could fly whenever I want, I want to travel the world.
5. Especially, when I am exhausted and tired, It gives me a great refreshment.
>>CORRECT
OR>>Especially when I am exhausted and tired, it revitalizes me.
6. Also, when I want to see great musical and music show abroad, It is easy to go there.
>>CORRECT
OR>>Not only that, when I want to see great musicals and music shows outside the country, it is easy to go there.
7. How wonderful it is!
>>CORRECT
OR>>How wonderful it would be!
Very good essay.
- T. Melody ^^
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