Homework 9.16
학생이 쓴 원문
What would happen if you could fly whenever you wanted? When would you use this ability?
I want to do many things if i have a flying ability.
First, I want to fly to other countries with my family or my friends.
Flying would be very great and I can have a great experiences with my family and friends.
Secondly, I want to help poor countries people with this ability.
Some of them are very hard to bring water because water is so far from their home.
I want to carry water for them flying the sky
강사 첨삭
1. I want to do many things if i have a flying ability.
>>CORRECT
>>CORRECT
OR>>I like to do a lot of things if I could fly.
2. First, I want to fly to other countries with my family or my friends.
>>CORRECT
OR>>One, I want to fly to different countries with my family or my friends.
3. Flying would be very great and I can have a great experiences with my family and friends.
>>Flying would be very great, and I can have great experiences with my family and friends.
4. Secondly, I want to help poor countries people with this ability.
>>Secondly, I want to help people in developing countries with this ability.
5. Some of them are very hard to bring water because water is so far from their home.
>>Some of them have a hard to bring water because water is so far from their home.
6. I want to carry water for them flying the sky.
>>I want to carry water for them by flying in the sky.
Nice essay, Michelle!
- T. Melody ^^
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