HOMEWORK 9/17, About my parent

2015-09-18 · 첨삭 강사 Jeny

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There is no parents now. My parents were same age. They got married at 1955 for 10 years, Their age was 19 old. His job was teacher of elementary school in small rural village. But, He died suddenly at 1964, 29 old., When i was 5 years old. I don't still know why he died. I heard from many neighbors that he was very honorable life. He was kind and handsome man. After his death, She only brought up three children, I am a secnd one. At that time Women were not able to get job easily. Then, She went through many hardships to raise her children. But She died in a bus accident at 1993, 59 old. I still tears whenever I think them. I still respect my parents, so I am living so as not to derogate fame of them. I am pity, am not i? Jenny, Don't worry about. I am very bright man. I want to hear about your parents or family at tomorrow class, If you don't mind. Have a nice day.

강사 첨삭

Hello there, Oh!!!

I am sorry to hear about your parents but I know that you have good memories to remember with them.

It\'s okay we can talk about my parents tomorrow, actually, I don\'t have many memories with them because they died when I was young.

Take care!!!!

 

T. Jeny

 

There is no parents now.

>>I don\'t have my parents now.

>>My parents are gone now.
My parents were same age.

>>My parents are of the same age.
They got married at 1955 for 10 years, Their age was 19 old.

>>They got married when they were 19 years old in 1955 and they were together for 10 years.

>>They got married when they were 19 years old in 1955 for 10 years.
His job was teacher of elementary school in small rural village.

>>My father was an elementary school teacher in a small village.
But, He died suddenly at 1964, 29 old., When i was 5 years old.

>>But suddenly, he died at the age of 29 in 1964, when I was 5 years old.
I don\'t still know why he died.
>>I still don\'t know the reason why he died.

I heard from many neighbors that he was very honorable life.
>>I heard from our neighbors that he was an honorable man.

He was kind and handsome man.

>>He was a kind and handsome man.
After his death, She only brought up three children, I am a secnd one.

>>I am the second child and my mother brought the three of us.
At that time Women were not able to get job easily.

>>At that time, it was difficult for women to look for a job.

Then, She went through many hardships to raise her children.

>>She went through hardships in raising her children.
But She died in a bus accident at 1993, 59 old.

>>Unfortunately, she died in a bus accident in 1993 at the age of 59.
I still tears whenever I think them.

>>I still cry whenever I think of them.
I still respect my parents, so I am living so as not to derogate fame of them.

>>I still respect my parents, so I won\'t derogate my memories of them.
I am pity, am not i?

>>Don\'t have pity on me.
Jenny, Don\'t worry about.

>>Jenny, don\'t worry about me.

I am very bright man.
>>I am a very bright man.
I want to hear about your parents or family at tomorrow class, If you don\'t mind.
>>I want to hear about your parents or family tomorrow during our class, if you don\'t mind.
Have a nice day.

>>correct

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