Homework 9.2 essay

2020-09-02 · 첨삭 강사 Melody

학생이 쓴 원문

Q. When do you feel most energized? What do you like to do with that energy? A. I feel energized when I ate my favorite food fully. And I like to exercise with that energy. Exercising makes us healthy. Also, I feel energized after I finished my daily works. So I like to watch movie with some snacks after I finished all of it.

강사 첨삭

1. I feel energized when I ate my favorite food fully.
>>I feel energized after fully eating my favorite food.

2. And I like to exercise with that energy.
>>CORRECT
OR>>And I prefer to exercise with that energy.

3. Exercising makes us healthy. 
>>CORRECT
OR>>Exercise makes us healthy.

4. Also, I feel energized after I finished my daily works.
>>CORRECT
>>Also, I feel energized after finishing my daily task.

5. So I like to watch movie with some snacks after I finished all of it.
>>So I like to watch a movie with some snacks after I finished all of it.

Good job, Michelle!

- T. Melody ^^

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