Homework 9/20

2017-09-21 · 첨삭 강사 Lorna

학생이 쓴 원문

Do you prefer to go shopping alone or with friends? Why? I always prefer to do alone. I enjoy going to see a movie, to trim hair, even to have a meal. And shopping is not exception. Only when I buy what I want, I don't need to blame anyone. But in case of clothes, It's different. I'm not interested in clothes or cosmetics in fashion, so I demand a lot of advice from friends, especially my girlfriend. But, it doesn't mean that I always buy clothes that they recommended, but I consider one of them recommended. And sometimes buying clothes is one of enjoyable playing to people, especially not to male-friends. Not only choosing other's clothes but also wearing the clothes that they recommended gives a fun to them. Though I prefer to enjoy doing alone, That's why the reason that I go shopping with others.

강사 첨삭

Hey there, Ian!:)
How are you doing this Thursday?
I hope that you did great on the last day of your preliminary test.
Great job in doing your homework again!:)
I will see you later!!

~ T. Lorna^-^

I always prefer to do alone.
>> Correct! 
OR:
>> I always prefer to shop alone.
I enjoy going to see a movie, to trim hair, even to have a meal.
>> I enjoy going to see a movie, to trim my hair and  to have a meal.
And shopping is not exception.
>> Of course shopping is not an exception.
Only when I buy what I want, I don
\'t need to blame anyone. But in case of clothes, It\'s different.
>> I just want to buy what I want and  there\'s no need to bother anyone except when I want to buy clothes.
I\'m not interested in clothes or cosmetics in fashion, so I demand a lot of advice from friends, especially my girlfriend.
>> I\'m not interested in fashion or cosmetics so I demand a lot of advice from my friends, especially my girlfriend.
But, it doesn\'t mean that I always buy clothes that they recommended, but I consider one of them recommended.
>> It doesn\'t mean to say that I always buy clothes that they recommend though I consider their recommendations.
And sometimes buying clothes is one of enjoyable playing to people, especially not to male-friends.
>> Sometimes, buying or shopping clothes is a way to enjoy with friends especially girl friends.
Not only choosing other\'s clothes but also wearing the clothes that they recommended gives a fun to them.
>> It is not only the choosing part which makes us have fun but also wearing the clothes that they chose for us.
Though I prefer to enjoy doing alone, That\'s why the reason that I go shopping with others.
>> Those are the reasons why I go shopping with other people but I really prefer to shop alone.

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