homework 9.21
학생이 쓴 원문
If you could only take 3 people with you on a trip around the world, who would you take and why?
; If I could only take 3 people with my world travel, I will take my mother and my aunt, my friend named 서영.
Because my mother and my aunt like to travel and they are very close. I want to make them happy with the trip.
And my friend 서영 is very fun and I am happy when I play with her.
Also she is a girl of planning quality. We will go world travel someday!
강사 첨삭
1. If I could only take 3 people with my world travel, I will take my mother and my aunt, my friend named 서영.
>>If I could only take three people with travel around the world, I will take my mother, my aunt, and my friend named 서영.
2. Because my mother and my aunt like to travel and they are very close.
>>CORRECT
OR>>Because my mom and my aunt are fond of traveling and they are very close.
3. I want to make them happy with the trip.
>>CORRECT
OR>>I want to make them happy, that\'s why I would take them.
4. And my friend 서영 is very fun and I am happy when I play with her.
>>And my friend 서영 is very fun to be with, and I am happy when I play with her.
5. Also she is a girl of planning quality.
>>Also, she is a girl who plans very well.
6. We will go world travel someday!
>>We will travel around the world someday!
Very nice, Michelle!
- T. Melody ^^
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