HOMEWORK 9/23, Traditional values
학생이 쓴 원문
강사 첨삭
Hello Oh,
Very good!!!! You made a good job on your homework. Please don\'t forget to memorize or remember the words so that you can use it on your daily conversation. I encourage you to read and meet new words so that it can improve your vocabulary skills.
T. Jeny
Dear [Name].
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These topics of traditional values are very difficult for me, but These are good questions. thanks.
>>This topic about traditional values are very difficult for me, but it is a good question. Thanks.
1. Predominance of men over women
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In the past, Men(grandfather, father, and sons) alway eated at dining table, women(grandmother, mother, and daughters) eated under dining table.
>>In the past, men always eat at the dining table while women eat outside the dining table.
2. Offering parents of the eldest son.
>>The eldest son offer their lives to their parents.
The eldest son only served his parents while a his parent\'s lifetime.
>>The eldest son will serve his parents until they die.
Therefore, Other children was sacrificed for the eldest.
>>Therefore, other children do nothing.
In case of women, The name also built haphazardly like \"1girl\', \"2girl\",..etc.
>>For women, they get their names haphazardly like \"1girl\', \"2girl\",..etc.
3. One for all than all for one.
>>One for all and one for all.
The personal dignity was ignored due to the value of the organization.
>>Personal dignity is ignored to protect the value of the organization.
4. Blue and white color
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There were high and low job.
>>There are high and low leveled jobs.
Maestro and actor were treated as a clown or Pierrot.
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All occupations are equally honorable.
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5. Apartheid
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Many Koreans still think they are superior to southasian.
>>Many Koreans still think that they are superior among South Asian countries.
I don\'t understand why.
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As a man of Korean, I am ashamed of having a such thought.
>>As a Korean man, I am ashamed of having such thought.
I am denying the above.
>>I want to deny all of the above.
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