HOMEWORK 9/23, Traditional values

2015-09-24 · 첨삭 강사 Jeny

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Dear [Name]. These topics of traditional values are very difficult for me, but These are good questions. thanks. 1. Predominance of men over women In the past, Men(grandfather, father, and sons) alway eated at dining table, women(grandmother, mother, and daughters) eated under dining table. 2. Offering parents of the eldest son. The eldest son only served his parents while a his parent's lifetime. Therefore, Other children was sacrificed for the eldest. In case of women, The name also built haphazardly like "1girl', "2girl",..etc. 3. One for all than all for one. The personal dignity was ignored due to the value of the organization. 4. Blue and white color There were high and low job. Maestro and actor were treated as a clown or pierrot. All occupations are equally honorable. 5. Aparthheid Many Koreans still think they are superior to southasian. I don't understand why. As a man of Korean, I am ashamed of having a such thought. I am denying the above.

강사 첨삭

Hello Oh,

Very good!!!! You made a good job on your homework. Please don\'t forget to memorize or remember the words so that you can use it on your daily conversation. I encourage you to read and meet new words so that it can improve your vocabulary skills.

T. Jeny

 

Dear [Name].

>>correct
These topics of traditional values are very difficult for me, but These are good questions. thanks.
>>This topic about traditional values are very difficult for me, but it is a good question. Thanks.
1. Predominance of men over women

>>correct
In the past, Men(grandfather, father, and sons) alway eated at dining table, women(grandmother, mother, and daughters) eated under dining table.

>>In the past, men always eat at the dining table while women eat outside the dining table.
2. Offering parents of the eldest son.

>>The eldest son offer their lives to their parents.
The eldest son only served his parents while a his parent\'s lifetime.

>>The eldest son will serve his parents until they die.
Therefore, Other children was sacrificed for the eldest.

>>Therefore, other children do nothing.
In case of women, The name also built haphazardly like \"1girl\', \"2girl\",..etc.

>>For women, they get their names haphazardly like \"1girl\', \"2girl\",..etc.
3. One for all than all for one.

>>One for all and one for all.
The personal dignity was ignored due to the value of the organization.

>>Personal dignity is ignored to protect the value of the organization.
4. Blue and white color

>>correct
There were high and low job.

>>There are high and low leveled jobs.
Maestro and actor were treated as a clown or Pierrot.

>>correct
All occupations are equally honorable.

>>correct
5. Apartheid

>>correct
Many Koreans still think they are superior to southasian.

>>Many Koreans still think that they are superior among South Asian countries.
I don\'t understand why.

>>correct
As a man of Korean, I am ashamed of having a such thought.

>>As a Korean man, I am ashamed of having such thought.
I am denying the above.

>>I want to deny all of the above.

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