Homework 9.29
학생이 쓴 원문
Do video games, TV, and movies have a negative influence on youth?
: Yes. I think video games, TV have a negative influence on youth. If youth do video games and watch TV excessively, youth\'s health will become worse. Such as their sight. And they can be addicted to game and TV. However, I think watch a movie is good to youth. Because youth can get some lessons from movie. Also, they can en[이름]ce their creativity watching a movie.
강사 첨삭
1. Yes.
>>CORRECT
OR>>Yes, it has.
2. I think video games, TV have a negative influence on youth.
>>I think video games and TV have a negative influence on youth.
3. If youth do video games and watch TV excessively, youth\'s health will become worse. Such as their sight.
>>If the youth do video games and watch TV excessively, their health will become worse such as their sight.
4. And they can be addicted to game and TV.
>>Also, they can be addicted to games and TV.
5. However, I think watch a movie is good to youth.
>>However, I think watching a movie is good for youth.
6. Because youth can get some lessons from movie.
>>Because youth can get some lessons from movies.
7. Also, they can en[이름]ce their creativity watching a movie.
>>Furthermore, they can en[이름]ce their creativity by watching a movie.
Nice point, Michelle!
- T. Melody ^^
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