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2017-10-02 · 첨삭 강사 Lorna

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Have you ever been in a difficult situation while traveling? Elaborate your answer. I have seen two racists in Toronto, Canada and San francisco, USA. One of racist who I have seen in USA made his eyes slanted in his car when I was walking on the Golden bridge. I was so surprised and angry of this impolite person especially in California. Because I heard California is one of largest melting pot in the world, so I didn't expect this situation. The experience in Toronto, Canada was same. Even though I was in Korean town located in downtown, a man in the driving car yelled at me and laughed. I still hope that those people aren't racists but bloody juckies. I know that there are a lot of good people and just a few of racists. But an afraid thing is that these bad memories make me judge these countries. Through this experience, I always remind that I can be a first impression of Korea to foreigners, and that's the reason why I try to act kindly against them.

강사 첨삭

Hey there, Ian!!:)
How are you doing over there?
How was your weekend?
Good job in doing your homework.
I\'ll see you later.

T. Lorna^^

I have seen two racists in Toronto, Canada and San francisco, USA.
>> I have seen two racists in Toronto, Canada and San Francisco, USA.
One of racist who I have seen in USA made his eyes slanted in his car when I was walking on the Golden bridge.
>> One of the racists  that I have seen in the USA raised his eyebrows at me while in his car when I was walking on the Golden bridge.
I was so surprised and angry of this impolite person especially in California.
>> I was so surprised and angry to this impolite person especially in California.
Because I heard California is one of largest melting pot in the world, so I didn\'t expect this situation.
>> Because I heard that California is one of largest melting pot in the world and I didn\'t expect this situation.
The experience in Toronto, Canada was same.
>> The experience in Toronto, Canada was the same.
Even though I was in Korean town located in downtown, a man in the driving car yelled at me and laughed.
>> Even though I was at the Korean town located downtown, a man driving a car yelled at me and laughed.
I still hope that those people aren\'t racists but bloody juckies.
>> I still hope that those people aren\'t racists but bloody junkies. (Do you mean junkies?)
I know that there are a lot of good people and just a few of racists.
>> I know that there are a lot of good people and just a few racists out there.
But an afraid thing is that these bad memories make me judge these countries.
>> The bad thing is, these memories makes me think and feel bad towards these countries.
Through this experience, I always remind that I can be a first impression of Korea to foreigners, and that\'s the reason why I try to act kindly against them.
>> With this experience, I always remind myself that I am always a Korean in the eyes of foreigners so I have to act kindly towards them.

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