Homework 9/8
학생이 쓴 원문
What is your opinion about actors or actresses who run for a position in politics?
In order to make a better society politics must exist.
The more people have a interest in politics, the better.
In that point, entertainers who run for a position in politics are not bad.
In fact, doing not talk about politics and their own philosophy is worst situation.
Everybody can say their thoughts, and actors or actresses are not exception.
Though some fans can be disappointed of thoughts or statements of their idol, it's better than society that cannot express their own thoughts.
All actors and actresses have a responsibility that boost their fans to take part in activities of issue, especially during election period.
I'm just worrying that some of fans just follow their favorite actor's insist without their considering.
In spite of this worrying, I think it would be better than silent and stupid society.
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In order to make a better society politics must exist.
>> In order to have a better society, politics must exist.
The more people have a interest in politics, the better.
>> The more people who are interested in politics, the better.
In that point, entertainers who run for a position in politics are not bad.>> In this point, I can say that entertainers who run for a position in politics are not bad.
In fact, doing not talk about politics and their own philosophy is worst situation.
In fact, doing not talk about politics and their own philosophy is worst situation.
>> In fact, it is more worst when people do not talk about politics and their own philosophies.
Everybody can say their thoughts, and actors or actresses are not exception.
Everybody can say their thoughts, and actors or actresses are not exception.
>> Everybody can express their thoughts so actors and actresses are not an exception.
Though some fans can be disappointed of thoughts or statements of their idol, it\'s better than society that cannot express their own thoughts.
Though some fans can be disappointed of thoughts or statements of their idol, it\'s better than society that cannot express their own thoughts.
>> We can\'t avoid that some fans can be disappointed because of the thoughts or statements of their idol but I think this is better than a society that can not express its own thoughts.
All actors and actresses have a responsibility that boost their fans to take part in activities of issue, especially during election period.
>> All actors and actresses have an ability to encourage their fans to take part in a certain activity especially during the election period.
I\'m just worrying that some of fans just follow their favorite actor\'s insist without their considering.
>> The only thing that worries me is that when some fans will follow their favorite actors or actresses ideas without thinking if it is good for the society.
In spite of this worrying, I think it would be better than silent and stupid society.
In spite of this worrying, I think it would be better than silent and stupid society.
>> However, I still think that this is better rather than to keep silent and not doing something for the society.
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