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2019-05-27 · 첨삭 강사 Irene

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Essay What is the funniest moment you can remember about your youth? It is not a funny story to me but it will make you laugh. About 5 years ago, I got a text from someone who sells cigaretts on half price. that times, Korea goverment rasied the price of cigaretts on double price. I was very interested and aked him how I can buy. He gave his internet address and explained how he could sell on half price. He said, he buys korean cigaretts in China on duty free and sends to me by air disguising packing. I visited the internet shop and read a lot of reviews. I sent him100$ and waited about 2 weeks wishing to get the cigaretts. It didn\'t arrive after waiting a month so I visited his internet shop but It didn\'t open. I sensed I was cheated. I found there were many people are swindled. someone wrote that he sent 3000$ to him, the money was gathered by people who get informed the internet shop by him. he is really in big troule and has to refund to them . to be continued

강사 첨삭

Hello there Ms. [이름]. My, my Ms [이름]. You were deceived! Well, at least you only paid $100 as compared to $3000. However, to me that is still a substantial amount of money. ^_^

~ T. Irene ~

Essay What is the funniest moment you can remember about your youth?

It is not a funny story to me but it will make you laugh.

>>>  Correct.    

About 5 years ago, I got a text from someone who sells cigaretts on half price.

>>>   About 5 years ago, I got a text from someone who sells cigarettes at  half the actual price.

that times, Korea goverment rasied the price of cigaretts on double price.

>>> At that time, the Korean government doubled the price of cigarettes.  

I was very interested and aked him how I can buy.

>>>  Correct.  

He gave his internet address and explained how he could sell on half price.

>>>  He gave his internet address and explained how he could sell at half the price.

He said, he buys korean cigaretts in China on duty free and sends to me by air disguising packing.

>>> He said, he buys Korean cigarettes in China\'s duty free shops and will send them to me by air disguising as a package.  
 I visited the internet shop and read a lot of reviews.

>>> Correct.   
 I sent him100$ and waited about 2 weeks wishing to get the cigaretts.

>>>   I sent him100$ and waited about 2 weeks wishing to get the cigarettes.
 It didn\'t arrive after waiting a month so I visited his internet shop but It didn\'t open.

>>>  When I didn\'t get the package after a month I tried opening his internet webpage but it didn\'t open.  
 I sensed I was cheated.

>>> Correct.   
 I found there were many people are swindled.

>>>  I found  out there were many people  who were swindled. 

someone wrote that he sent 3000$ to him, the money was gathered by people who get informed the internet shop by him.

>>> Someone even paid him $3000 and the money were collected by those people from the internet shop.

he is really in big troule and has to refund to them .

>>>  He was really in a big trouble and had to refund the money to them.  
 to be continued

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