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2019-05-30 · 첨삭 강사 Irene

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ESSAY: What are the biggest challenges your country is facing right now? What about the world? I think korea is still struggling with corrupted politicians and wealthy people. This govermant tries to find corruptions during the past goverments. Untill now, we find out many dirty connections with celebrities or wealthy persons and past goverments workers and politicians soemthing like that. That\'s why I support this Moon President goverment. I am wondering if it is possible to make the country existing fairness and justice. It may just my dream because I think it is not possible as long as greedy human existe on this world. But I will not give up hoping that we can make a dreaming country someday.

강사 첨삭

Ms. [이름], please get well. Take care of your health especially at this age. We are not exactly young anymore. ^_^

~ T. Irene~

ESSAY: What are the biggest challenges your country is facing right now? What about the world? 
I think korea is still struggling with corrupted politicians and wealthy people.

>>>   I think Korea is still struggling with corrupt politicians and greedy wealthy people.
 This govermant tries to find corruptions during the past goverments.

>>> This government  is trying to investigate the corruptions committed by previous governments.  
 Untill now, we find out many dirty connections with celebrities or wealthy persons and past goverments workers and politicians soemthing like that.

>>> Up to this time, we still find many dirty connections between celebrities or wealthy persons and past goverments workers and politicians.   
 That\'s why I support this Moon President goverment.
>>>   That\'s why I support  President  Moon\'s government.
I am wondering if it is possible to make the country existing fairness and justice.

>>> I am wondering if it is possible to have a country with fair and just system.  
 It may just my dream because I think it is not possible as long as greedy human existe on this world.

 >>> It may just be in my dreams because I think it is not possible so long as greedy people exist in this world.    
But I will not give up hoping that we can make a dreaming country someday.

>>> But I will not give up hoping that we can have an ideal country someday.   


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