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What are good effects of what Korean soldiers did in the war or the present Korea?
When Korean War was broken out of North Korea for communization in 1950, military power of our South Korea was not enough to defend them. So South Korea was occupied to the end of south side. At that time, with the participation of the United Nations Force including your country, our country has become the present situation. So, our government was realized importance of national defense capability. I appreciate sacrifice of a number of soldiers of Korea and other countries.
Thank you very much for.your kind teaching.
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Hello Bella ^^
Thank you so much for answering this homework. I appreciate it so much. Keep learning and you\'ll soon make it.
I should be the one thanking you for listening to me. It\'s my joy to be appreciated by my students. ^^
Sincerely,
Teacher Annie
What are good effects of what Korean soldiers did in the war or the present Korea?
When Korean War was broken out of North Korea for communization in 1950, military power of our South Korea was not enough to defend them.
>>>When the Korean war broke out of the North Korea pushing communism in 1950, the military power of South Korea was not enough to defend its territory.
So South Korea was occupied to the end of south side. At that time, with the participation of the United Nations Force including your country, our country has become the present situation.
>>>So South Korea was at the losing team. But with the aid of the United Nations including the Philippines, our country is now at its present situation.
So, our government was realized importance of national defense capability. I appreciate sacrifice of a number of soldiers of Korea and other countries.
>>>Because of what happened, our government realized the importance of national defense. I personally appreciate the sacrifices done by the Korean soldiers and other soldiers from other countries.
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