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2019-06-13 · 첨삭 강사 Irene

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ESSAY: Are national holidays important to the people in a country? Why or why not? National holidays make people binding together in celebrating or grief to the national history. Some people may think it is just holiday but It can be a valuable and memoriable day to someone. I think national holidays are important to the people as long as we are belonging in society. To me, I hope that I can use all the national holidays when I want to to use. I mean, If the national holidays are 50 days a year, I can take 50 holidays when I want to use. If it is possible, I can go world trip for a month and I can take a rest When I feel sick like thesedays.

강사 첨삭

Hi [이름]!

I know that English writing is challenging but I know that you can do it.

You just need more practice.

Always remember to spell words correctly.

Use proper punctuation marks and be mindful on your capitalization, too.

I will look forward to your progress.

Fighting!


National holidays make people binding together in celebrating or grief to the national history.

>> National holidays make people bind together in commemoration of the national history.
Some people may think it is just holiday but It can be a valuable and memoriable day to someone.

>> Some people may think it is just a holiday but it can be a valuable and memorable day to someone.
I think national holidays are important to the people as long as we are belonging in society. 

>> I think national holidays are important to people as long as we belong in the society. 
To me, I hope that I can use all the national holidays when I want to to use.

>> I hope that I can spend all the national holidays the way I want to.

I mean, If the national holidays are 50 days a year, I can take 50 holidays when I want to use.

>> I mean, if national holidays are 50 days a year, I can spend 50 holidays the way I want to.

If it is possible, I can go world trip for a month and I can take a rest When I feel sick like thesedays.

>> If it is possible, I can go for a world trip for a month and I can take a rest when I feel sick like these days.

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