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2019-06-17 · 첨삭 강사 Lucy

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convenience store There is a convenience store which is called \"emart 24\" on the first floor of my place. It opens 7am and closes 12am. I don\'t know why it put \"24\" on thier name. Anyway, it is hard work. Staffs work in shifts. I don\'t know how many shifts they are. Whenever I go there, staff is different. I rarely go there. The convenience store is very convenient. Especially, at the night time. Sometimes, I run out of drinks or foods. Then I force my sons to buy them at the convenience store. But the price is not reasonable. It is vicious. Except emergency, I usually go to the supermarket to buy groceries. It takes about 10 minutes by walk. The good thing is that the supermarket has a delivery system. Yet it has a limit. If there are many orders, it dosen\'t take the delivery order anymore. I should go there early. Anyway, the thing that there is a convenience store near my place is good for my children.

강사 첨삭

Thank you Ms. [이름]!


~Teacher Lucy



There is a convenience store which is called \"emart 24\" on the first floor of my place.

>>There is a convenience store which is called \"emart 24\" in the first floor of my place.


It opens 7am and closes 12am.

>>CORRECT!

>>The business starts at 7 am and ends at 12 am.


I don\'t know why it put \"24\" on thier name.

>>I don\'t know why they put \"24\" on their name.


Anyway, it is hard work.

>>CORRECT!

>>Moreover, they are workaholic.


Staffs work in shifts. 

>>CORRECT!

>>Staffs work in various schedule.


I don\'t know how many shifts they are. 

>>I don\'t know how many shifts they have. 


Whenever I go there, staff is different.

>>CORRECT!

>>Whenever I go there,


I rarely go there.

>>CORRECT!

>>I hardly go there.


The convenience store is very convenient.

>>CORRECT!

>>It\'s very convenient.


Especially, at the night time. 

>>CORRECT!

>>Particularly at night.


Sometimes, I run out of drinks or foods.

>>CORRECT!

>>I Sometimes run out of drinks or foods.


Then I force my sons to buy them at the convenience store.

>>Then, I force my sons to buy them at the convenience store.

>>Thus, I force my sons to buy them at the convenience store.


But the price is not reasonable.

>>CORRECT!

>>But the prices are not reasonable.


It is vicious.

>>CORRECT!

>>It\'s overpriced.


Except emergency, I usually go to the supermarket to buy groceries.

>>CORRECT!

>>I usually go to the supermarket to buy groceries except for emergency situations.


It takes about 10 minutes by walk.

>>CORRECT!

>>It takes about 10 minutes by walking.


The good thing is that the supermarket has a delivery system. 

>>CORRECT!

>>It has a delivery department.


Yet, it has a limit.

>>CORRECT!

>>However, it has a limit.


If there are many orders, it doesn\'t take the delivery order anymore. 

>>CORRECT!

>>If there are many orders, they can\'t accommodate order anymore.


I should go there early.

>>CORRECT!

>>I should be there promptly.


Anyway, the thing that there is a convenience store near my place is good for my children.

>>Anyway, the thing is the convenience store near my place is good for my children.



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