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2019-06-20 · 첨삭 강사 Lucy

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Do you like traveling with children? Of course not. I really love to travel with my husband or my freinds. There is an irony. When chlidren want their parents, parents are busy. But when parents want children, children become busier. Anyway, I really want to travell when I really want to go and where I really want to go. How much luggage do you usually carry when traveling? A long time ago, I thought I had to bring everything that I needed. So my luggage became bigger and bigger. But now, my mind was changed. Now I prefer a small luggage that I can bring inside the airplane. I don\'t want to waist my time with wating for my luggage in front of the carousel. I was effected from my husband. He can pack very easily. He says he dosen\'t need everything. For example, he usually pack one extra pants and one extra shirts. Our luggage become smaller and smaller.

강사 첨삭

Thank you Ms. [이름]!


~Teacher Lucy


Of course not.

>>CORRECT!

>>Absolutely not.


I really love to travel with my husband or my friends.

>>CORRECT!

>>I prefer traveling with my husband and friends.


There is an irony.

>>CORRECT!

>>This is the paradox.


When children want their parents, parents are busy.

>>CORRECT!
>>Parents are busy when children  their children need them.


But when parents want children, children become busier.

>>CORRECT!

>>Children become busier when parents need them.


Anyway, I really want to travel when I really want to go and where I really want to go.

>>CORRECT!

>>Nevertheless, I really want to travel anytime and wherever I want.

A long time ago, I thought I had to bring everything that I needed.

>>CORRECT!

>>Back then, I though I had to bring everything I need.


So my luggage became bigger and bigger. 

>>CORRECT!

>>Thus, I needed larger luggage.


But now, my mind was changed.

>>CORRECT!

>>Apparently, it changed.


Now I prefer a small luggage that I can bring inside the airplane. 

>>CORRECT!

>>Nowadays, I prefer a handy luggage that I can easily bring in the plane.


I don\'t want to waist my time with wating for my luggage in front of the carousel.

>>I don\'t want to waste my time with wating for my luggage in front of the carousel.


I was effected from my husband.

>>I was affected by my husband.

>>I was influenced by my husband.


He can pack very easily.

>>CORRECT!

>>He can simply pack .


He says he doesn\'t need everything.

>>CORRECT!

>>He\'s a minimalist.


For example, he usually pack one extra pants and one extra shirts. 

>>For example, he usually pack one pair of extra pants and one extra shirt. 


Our luggage become smaller and smaller.

>>CORRECT!

>>Our luggage became handy.


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