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2019-06-24 · 첨삭 강사 Jeny

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ESSAY: What do you know about the trade war between China and the U.S.? As I known, China has been copied a lot of products for many years. And now, the quality of their goods is comparable as much as the other countries. For example, their phone threatens iphone because of the low price which can cover some problems. Moreover, China spends plenty of money for scouting high-quality human resources and Technologies. U.S.A realized that phenomenon and wanted to protect their items. So they held trade war. I have no idea which part is good and which one is bad. But I know it can make people to be die because of losing their job although there are no weapon, nuclear, bomb and tank same as before. Actually, I don\'t watch news nowadays because of becoming lazy. So I have poor knowledge about it and can\'t make this essay longer.

강사 첨삭

Hello [이름],

It is really nice of you to share wonderful idea about the topic.

On the other hand, I know that this activity will help you enhance your skills in English.

Have fun in learning, [이름]!!! 

T. Jeny


ESSAY: What do you know about the trade war between China and the U.S.?
>>correct
As I known, China has been copied a lot of products for many years.

>>As I have known, China has been coping a lot of products for many years.
And now, the quality of their goods is comparable as much as the other countries.

>>correct
For example, their phone threatens iphone because of the low price which can cover some problems.

>>correct

 Moreover, China spends plenty of money for scouting high-quality human resources and Technologies. 
>> Moreover, China spends plenty of money on scouting high-quality human resources and Technologies. 
U.S.A realized that phenomenon and wanted to protect their items.

>>The U.S.A discovered that phenomenon and wanted to protect their items.

So they held trade war.
>>correct
I have no idea which part is good and which one is bad.

>>correct

But I know it can make people to be die because of losing their job although there are no weapon, nuclear, bomb and tank same as before.
>>But I know it can make people die because of losing their jobs although there is no weapon, nuclear, bomb, and tank same as before.
 Actually, I don\'t watch news nowadays because of becoming lazy.

>> Actually, I don\'t watch the news nowadays because I\'m becoming lazy.

 So I have poor knowledge about it and can\'t make this essay longer.

>>correct


   


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