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학생이 쓴 원문
Actually I recommend you to visit jeju island once or twice. Even though [이름]istry is advertising prostine environment in jeju, most places were commercialized. But commercialization makes young people to go to jeju which has a lot of theme park.
But when i go there, I always take a drive in a car along the beach to see a good scenery and walk on the forrest to breath fresh air.
I think these coexist environment increase the tourist. And Jeju have many cuisine like see food, blck-folk, local food, and various fruits and so on. A plenty of cuisines makes attract more visitors.
Not long ago, A jeju life Tv program was shown. In a program, A famous celebrity couple who live in jeju invited visitors and offered some place to take a rest in there and sometimes they are recommending some special palces for the visitors.
This program was enthusiastic for the visitors and it aid to attract more visitors.
강사 첨삭
Hello [이름] [이름]! Thank you for this. I think I know this TV program you are referring to. Is it Lee Hyo Ri? I have seen some episodes of this show. It was great!
- T. Beth
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Actually I recommend you to visit jeju island once or twice. >>> correct ( Actually, I recommend you to visit Jeju Island at least once or twice. )
Even though [이름]istry is advertising prostine environment in jeju, most places were commercialized.
>>> Even though the [이름]istry is advertising pristine environment in Jeju, most places were commercialized.
But commercialization makes young people to go to Jeju which has a lot of theme parks.
>>> correct
But when i go there, I always take a drive in a car along the beach to see a good scenery and walk on the forrest to breath fresh air.
But when i go there, I always take a drive in a car along the beach to see a good scenery and walk on the forrest to breath fresh air.
>>> But whenever I go there, I always take a drive in a car along the beach to see good scenery and walk in the forest to breathe fresh air.
I think these coexist environment increase the tourist.
>>> I think the coexistence of these environments increases the number of tourists.
And Jeju have many cuisine like see food, blck-folk, local food, and various fruits and so on.
>>> In addition, Jeju has many dishes like see food, black pork, local food, various fruits and so on.
A plenty of cuisines makes attract more visitors.
>>> A plenty of cuisines attracts more visitors.
Not long ago, A jeju life Tv program was shown.
>>> correct ( Not long ago, a Jeju life TV program was shown. )
In a program, A famous celebrity couple who live in jeju invited visitors and offered some place to take a rest in there and sometimes they are recommending some special palces for the visitors.
>>> In the program, a famous celebrity couple who live in jeju invited visitors and offered some place to take a rest in there and sometimes they are recommending some special places for the visitors.
>>> In the program, a famous celebrity couple who live in jeju invited visitors and offered some place to take a rest in there and sometimes they are recommending some special places for the visitors.
This program was enthusiastic for the visitors and it aid to attract more visitors.
>>> This program made visitors enthusiastic and it aid to attract more visitors.
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