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Hi, [이름]!
This is so true!
I think most people would also agree with you.
The internet is one of the biggest services that people actually rely on for communication and work.
So losing it would truly mean that the world would somehow stop.
~~t. Ally
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If internet connection losts, we can\'t work in the company and we can\'t communicate with people.
>> If the internet connection was lost, we can\'t work in our companies and we won\'t be able to communicate with people.
The whole work will be stoped.
>> All kinds of work will stop.
Today, People think that the communication is important.
>> Today, People think that communication is important.
When we give or receve the information, we usually use the internet.
>> When we give or receive information, we usually use the internet.
The internet makes to easy that people work and communicate.
>> The internet makes it easy for the people to work and communicate.
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