Homework

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It commend you for answering our homework for today. I know that writing an essay is quite difficult but I also know that it can enhance your skills in writing. Giving our best foot forward is a step for us to believe that we can write and communicate our thoughts and ideas in a topic using the English language.

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T. Jeny

ESSAY: What are the first steps to world peace?
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To eager getting something more and more is a kind of characteristic of human.
>>Eager to get something more is a kind of characteristic humans have.
Human do war and invade the other countries because they want to get more resources.

>>Human do war and invade other countries because they want to get more resources.
 People make classes to maintain their property and to live comfortable.
>>People create classes to maintain their properties to live comfortably.
So we still have been living in the unfair world even if our ancestors had a lot of wars to make it peaceful. 
>>So we still have been living in the unfair world even if our ancestors had fought a lot for peace.
Thus, I don\'t think there is no way to make world peace.

 >>correct

That\'s why we call it as an utopia or heaven which people would like to get there when they have done their life cycle.

>>That\'s why, we call it as utopia or heaven where people would like to get there when they are done with their life cycle.