homework
학생이 쓴 원문
강사 첨삭
Thank you Ms. [이름]!
~Teacher Lucy
I think so.
>>CORRECT!
But nowadays the rates are too low to invest.
>>CORRECT!
>>But nowadays the rates are too low to invest in.
Thus, people invest their money into stocks.
>>CORRECT!
>>Furthermore, people invest their money into stocks.
In my case, I just save my money into bank account not to touch.
>>In my case, I just save money in my bank account and not to touch.
I hope the bank rates will rise higher than now.
>>CORRECT!
>>I hope the bank rates will increase.
Yes. It\'s very useful.
>>CORRECT!
>>Yes, it\'s helpful.
I don\'t need to go to the bank to send money or check my balance.
>>CORRECT!
>>It\'s not necessary to go to the bank to deposit and update my money.
But I\'m afraid of a safety of online banking.
>>But I\'m afraid of the safety of online banking.
I often hear about hackers of online site.
>>I often hear about hackers of online.
Whenever I hear of that news, I\'m scary.
>>Whenever I hear of that news, I\'m scared.
Even though there is unsafety, many people use online bangking.
>>Even though it\'s unsafe many people still use online banking.
The usefulness beats the fear.
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>>The advantages beat the doubts.
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