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2019-07-10 · 첨삭 강사 Debbie

학생이 쓴 원문

This is my homework below. Actually, I haven\'t been interested in any kind of fairy tales since I\'ve been persuing realistic ones. However, I have to teach my elementary students fairy tales and then they used to perform them on stage. As teaching the storys, I found an impressive fairy tale, \"The Winter Qeen.\" Winter Queen must live in a cold and cold area which no one can survive but she can survive only here. To solve her lonelyness while living alone, she decides to kidnap a naive and pure young boy. And she blinds him not to escape. He should live but can\'t see anything and can\'t find any place. He can\'t see his grandpa who has taken care of. Anyway, it\'s so sad and gloomy story. Why I remember this is because of a French movie, excellent, profound, deep philosophy, letting me think what love is. The movie is made based on the story of \"The Winter Qeen.\" I\'d like to read it someday again.

강사 첨삭

This sounds interesting. Thank you for sharing ^^

- Teacher Debbie


Actually, I haven\'t been interested in any kind of fairy tales since I\'ve been persuing realistic ones. 
>> pursuing
However, I have to teach my elementary students fairy tales and then they used to perform them on stage. 
>> However, I have to teach my elementary students some fairy tales and then they will perform it on stage. 
As teaching the storys, I found an impressive fairy tale, \"The Winter Qeen.\" 
>> As I was teaching some stories, I found an impressive fairy tale entitled \"The Winter Queen.\"
Winter Queen must live in a cold and cold area which no one can survive but she can survive only here. 
>> The Winter Queen must live in a cold area where no one can survive but her. 
To solve her lonelyness while living alone, she decides to kidnap a naive and pure young boy. 
>> To solve her loneliness, she decides to kidnap a naive and pure young boy. 
And she blinds him not to escape. 
>> And she blinded him so that he won\'t escape. 
He should live but can\'t see anything and can\'t find any place. 
>> He could live but he can\'t find a place for him.
He can\'t see his grandpa who has taken care of. 
>> He can\'t find his grandpa who took care of him.
Anyway, it\'s so sad and gloomy story. 
>> Anyway, it\'s a very sad and gloomy story.
Why I remember this is because of a French movie, excellent, profound, deep philosophy, letting me think what love is. 
>> correct 
The movie is made based on the story of \"The Winter Qeen.\"
>> Queen
 I\'d like to read it someday again.
>> correct

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