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2019-07-22 · 첨삭 강사 Dee

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Do you think it is more important to make a lot of money or to enjoy your job? I always tell to new employees that it is very important to enjoy your job. You can’t work long if you do not enjoy your job even if you have a lot of salary. I know that I can’t be a rich only with my salary and it is important to make money for doing what I want to do. But, now that we have to worry about life after retirement, the limits of salarymen are definitely exist. Because the money collected by saving the salary is not enough to live the old age comfortably. These thoughts make me hard. Not all the rich happy but I think that sufficiency is better than lack of money.

강사 첨삭

Hello Sir [이름]! I agree with you. I think that it\'s really important to save for our future and at the same time we should also enjoy what we do while we still have the strength. Cheers to our fulfilled lives in the future! ~~T.Dee 


I always tell to new employees that it is very important to enjoy your job.

>>I always tell to the new employees that it is very important to enjoy your job.
 You can’t work long if you do not enjoy your job even if you have a lot of salary.

>>You can’t work long if you do not enjoy your job even if you have a high salary/a lot of money.
 I know that I can’t be a rich only with my salary and it is important to make money for doing what I want to do.

>>I know that I can’t be a rich only with my salary and it is important to make money to do what I want to do.
 But, now that we have to worry about life after retirement, the limits of salarymen are definitely exist.

>>But, now that we have to worry about life after retirement, limitations exist.

Because the money collected by saving the salary is not enough to live the old age comfortably.

>>The money kept by saving the salary is not enough to live comfortably in the old age.

These thoughts make me hard. 

>>These thoughts make me worry.

Not all the rich happy but I think that sufficiency is better than lack of money.

>>Not all the rich are happy but I think that sufficiency is better than lack of money.


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