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2019-07-23 · 첨삭 강사 Mayleen

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 What do you think children worry about the most? Kindly answer in 3-5 sentences. What children are most worried about is their first experience. For example, when I went on a trip with my nephew, he kept crying during takeoff. Because he was not used to hearing the sound of the engine and to the cabin. So our family had a lot of truoble to make him don\'t cry. Fortunately, The next flight(the return flight) he cryied less than before.

강사 첨삭

Hi there! ^-^


Hailey, this is a very good composition.

You have a point. Actually, not only children but adults too get flustered when it\'s their first time to experience things.

I guess it\'s human nature. I will see you later in class.^^


__T. Mayleen :)



What do you think children worry about the most? Kindly answer in 3-5 sentences.


What children are most worried about is their first experience.

>>> What children worry about the most is their first time to experience things.

For example, when I went on a trip with my nephew, he kept crying during takeoff.

>>> For example, when I went on a trip with my nephew, he kept crying during our flight.

Because he was not used to hearing the sound of the engine and to the cabin.

>>> It was because he wasn\'t used to the sound of the engine and it\'s his first time to be in a cabin.

So our family had a lot of truoble to make him don\'t cry.

>>> Thus, our family had struggled to pacify him or to stop him from crying.

Fortunately, The next flight(the return flight) he cryied less than before.

>>> Fortunately, he cried less in our flight back home.

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