homework
학생이 쓴 원문
In my country, young women should never be fat. That\'s why there are stories about obesity on TV. Obesity is harmful. But I don\'t think it\'s right for people to curse at fat people unconditionally.
강사 첨삭
Hi my friend!
Well, in my country being fat is not a huge issue. I\'m a little plump, but thankfully I\'m not obese! - hehehe
Thank you Ms. [Name]^^
Writing Task: Is obesity a big problem in your country? Why do you think that is?
In my country, young women should never be fat.
>>CORRECT!
That\'s why there are stories about obesity on TV.
>>CORRECT!
Obesity is harmful.
>>CORRECT!
But I don\'t think it\'s right for people to curse of at fat people unconditionally.
>>But I don\'t think it\'s right for people to curse of a fat person unconditionally.
OR: But I don\'t think it\'s right to speak ill of a fat person unconditionally.
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