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2019-07-29 · 첨삭 강사 Vance

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HOMEWORK: In an overpopulated world, should people be free to have as many children as they want? sure! when i included in army, i read a book called \'why half of in world people surfer hunger?\' this book is main character is about their hunger and poverty. according this book, world have a lot of food to eating for 10 billion people. but trade exchange is not well by bad economical system and high level chair man. Nothing to see about food problem perspective, if each country have high quality economical power and increase the self-support power in themselves, it doesn\'t matter what they need.

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Thank you for doing your homework. ^^

sure! when i included in army, i read a book called \'why half of in world people surfer hunger?\'

>>Sure! when I was in the army, I read a book called \'why half of in world people surfer hunger?\'

this book is main character is about their hunger and poverty.

>>This book is about hunger and poverty.

according this book, world have a lot of food to eating for 10 billion people.

>> According to this book, the world has sufficient food supply for 10 billion people.

but trade exchange is not well by bad economical system and high level chair man.

>>But the trade exchange is not doing well because of the bad economical system and the high level chairman.

Nothing to see about food problem perspective, if each country have high quality economical power and increase the self-support power in themselves, it doesn\'t matter what they need.

>>Nothing to notice about food problem perspective, if each country has a good quality of economical power and an increase of self-support power within themselves, it doesn\'t matter what they need.

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