homework
학생이 쓴 원문
Do you believe in luck? Tell about a time you felt so lucky.
Yes, I believe in luck.
When I was a first grade elememtary school girl ( I might be 7 years old.), I was very happy to going to a stationery shop.
There were so many affected things to me such like cute stationeries,toys and Barbie dolls.
That place was my dreaming playground although I could not afford to buy anything.
One day, I founded a beautiful dress for a Barbie doll and I decided to take it.
I watched around and checked the owner with pumping heart. and I took it to my house.
I was so happy to see may Barbie doll wearing the beautiful dress that night.
And a few days after, I tried to take one more dress for my doll and I went to the shop again.
When I was looking around, suddenly, the owner was shouting louldy so I looked at him with desperation.
He was scolding another students \" Don\'t open it, just see\"
I sighed with relief and thought it was very bad thing.
I was very lucky, weren\'t I ? ^^
강사 첨삭
Hi [이름]! ^ ^ Thank you so much for this lovely, \"back to the past\" homework of yours! ^ ^ I was really anxious to know what happened! Thankfully you weren\'t caught, you naughty girl! ^ ^ Some kind of luck you got there! ^ ^
-Teacher Jedah
>>Correct
When I was a first grade elememtary school girl ( I might be 7 years old.), I was very happy to going to a stationery shop.
When I was a first grade elememtary school girl ( I might be 7 years old.), I was very happy to going to a stationery shop.
>>When I was in first grade elementary (I might be 7 years old then), I really enjoyed going to the stationery shop.
There were so many affected things to me such like cute stationeries,toys and Barbie dolls.
There were so many affected things to me such like cute stationeries,toys and Barbie dolls.
>>There were so many things that attracted me such as cute stationery, toys and barbie dolls.
That place was my dreaming playground although I could not afford to buy anything.
That place was my dreaming playground although I could not afford to buy anything.
>>That place was my dream playground although I could not afford to buy anything.
One day, I founded a beautiful dress for a Barbie doll and I decided to take it.
>>One day, I found a beautiful dress for a Barbie doll and I decided to take it.
I watched around and checked the owner with pumping heart. and I took it to my house.
I watched around and checked the owner with pumping heart. and I took it to my house.
>>I looked around and checked the owner with a pounding heart, I didn\'t see him and so I brought it home.
I was so happy to see may Barbie doll wearing the beautiful dress that night.
I was so happy to see may Barbie doll wearing the beautiful dress that night.
>>Correct
And a few days after, I tried to take one more dress for my doll and I went to the shop again.
And a few days after, I tried to take one more dress for my doll and I went to the shop again.
>>And a few days after, I went to the shop again and I tried to take one more dress for my doll.
When I was looking around, suddenly, the owner was shouting louldy so I looked at him with desperation.
When I was looking around, suddenly, the owner was shouting louldy so I looked at him with desperation.
>>Correct (misspelled \"loudly\")
He was scolding another students \" Don\'t open it, just see\"
He was scolding another students \" Don\'t open it, just see\"
>>He was scolding another student and saying; \" Don\'t open it, just look\"
I sighed with relief and thought it was very bad thing.
I sighed with relief and thought it was very bad thing.
>>I sighed with relief and thought it was a very bad thing.
I was very lucky, weren\'t I ? ^^
I was very lucky, weren\'t I ? ^^
>>I was very lucky, wasn\'t I ? ^^
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