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2019-07-31 · 첨삭 강사 Debbie

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Your Room I have three rooms, two toilets and a living room in my house. One room is for my mother, the other room is the reading room. And the last one is for my husband, my children and me, I call this room ‘My room’ In my room instead of a bed we have two mats for sleeping and a wardrobe Inside of my room there is one of toilet. But we don’t use it as a toilet. We use it as a warehouse. I put all the things that we rarely used in to it. Except sleeping hour my family perceive it as a play room. Because there is little furniture and instead of a bed there are two fluffy mats. So it is safe for playing and I don’t need to consider much of interlayer noise.

강사 첨삭

A positive mind towards everything will give you a happier life.
Good Morning, [이름]!

- Teacher Debbie


Your Room

I have three rooms, two toilets and a living room in my house.
>> correct
One room is for my mother, the other room is the reading room.
>> correct
And the last one is for my husband, my children and me, I call this room ‘My room’
>> correct
>> or: The last room is for me and my own family that I call as \"My Room.\"
In my room instead of a bed we have two mats for sleeping and a wardrobe 
>> correct
Inside of my room there is one of toilet.
>> One of the toilets is in my room.
But we don’t use it as a toilet. 
>> correct
We use it as a warehouse.
>> correct
>> or: We use it as a stock room.
I put all the things that we rarely used in to it.
>> I put all the things that we rarely use in it.
Except sleeping hour my family perceive it as a play room.
>> Except on sleeping hours. my family perceive it as a play room.
Because there is little furniture and instead of a bed there are two fluffy mats.
>> correct
So it is safe for playing and I don’t need to consider much of interlayer noise.
>> So it is safe for playing and I don’t need to consider much about the room noise.
 

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