homework
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HOMEWORK: What are your dreams for the future, that you hope to achieve?
My dream is that always everyone made more happy and healthy everyone.
I think that most important thing is health and second is money.
Money is also important things when you lived reality.
It not wrong answer about \"money made people happy\"
So my realistic dream is earned lot of money.
When you sick, you just go to hospital and get a clinic after it will be all fine.
When you want to buy something it is also need money.
In the middle of money and happy have difference of people opinion.
Some people think that money is more important than happy and reverse opinion.
Finally, we can be compromise which both important when we lived.
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Thank you for doing your homework. ^^
>>My dream is that everyone would be happy and healthy.
I think that most important thing is health and second is money.
>>I think that the most important thing is health and the second is money.
Money is also important things when you lived reality.
>>Money is also an important thing in our reality.
It not wrong answer about \"money made people happy\"
>>It\'s not wrong to answer \"money makes people happy\"
So my realistic dream is earned lot of money.
>>So my realistic dream is to earn a lot of money.
When you sick, you just go to hospital and get a clinic after it will be all fine.
>>When you are sick, you just go to hospital and go to a clinic. After that it will be all fine.
When you want to buy something it is also need money.
>>When you want to buy something you would also need money.
In the middle of money and happy have difference of people opinion.
>>People have different opinions about money and happiness.
Some people think that money is more important than happy and reverse opinion.
>>Some people think that money is more important than happiness and vice-versa opinion.
Finally, we can be compromise which both important when we lived.
>>Finally, we can compromise on both important things in our life.
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