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2019-08-02 · 첨삭 강사 Debbie

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What was your ideal room when you were younger? Explain in detail. When I was young I didn\'t have my own room. I slept with my parents. So I didn\'t imagine what will my room like. I just dreamed I could have my own room. Now, if let me imagine my room. I would like it as simple as it can be. I don\'t like my rood have too much furniture or other things. I don\'t like mess. Although, now I have two kids, they are still young. So my house are full of toys, books and so on. But one day after my kids all have grown up. and they don\'t need those things any more. I will get rid of them as quickly as possible.

강사 첨삭

Thank you for answering. Here are my corrections ^^

-Teacher Debbie


When I was young I didn\'t have my own room.
>> correct
I slept with my parents.
>> correct
>> or: I used to sleep beside my parents.
So I didn\'t imagine what will my room like.
>> So I didn\'t imagine what will my room look like.
I just dreamed I could have my own room.
>> I just dreamed about having my own room someday.
Now, if let me imagine my room.
>> Now, if you will let me imagine my ideal room.
I would like it as simple as it can be.
>> I would like it to be as simple as it can be.
I don\'t like my rood have too much furniture or other things.
>> room*
I don\'t like mess.
>> correct
Although, now I have two kids, they are still young.
>> Although, I have two young kids.
So my house are full of toys, books and so on.
>> correct
But one day after my kids all have grown up.
>> But one day, my kids will grow older
and they don\'t need those things any more.
>> and they won\'t need those thing anymore.
I will get rid of them as quickly as possible.
>> correct
>> or: I will get rid of them as soon as possible.

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