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I always consider several aspects when I make a friend. Most qualities I consider are humor, talking carefully, and punctual person. First, there are many persons nowadays who didn’t consider person’s emotion so makes a person angry. I exhausted talking with these persons who lower my self-esteem. After that, I seek someone is able to consider other think carefully. Another quality is punctual person, which mean it is the way of respect other and their time. Finally, it’s additional, I prefer someone has a sense of humor. Whenever we face the hardship, I think humor is able to power to overcome. This is reason why I consider these qualities to make friends. Even though I might not find those persons, I try my best to be the person.
강사 첨삭
Hello Luna. Thank you again for this. Choosing people to surround yourself with is really important because they would have a big influence in our lives.
- T. Beth
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I always consider several aspects when I make a friend. >>> correct
Most qualities I consider are humor, talking carefully, and punctual person.
>>> correct
>>> OR: Most qualities I consider are humor, talking carefully, and punctuality.
First, there are many persons nowadays who didn’t consider person’s emotion so makes a person angry.
>>> First, there are many persons nowadays who don’t consider other person’s emotion so it makes a person angry.
I exhausted talking with these persons who lower my self-esteem.
>>> I am exhausted talking with these persons who lower my self-esteem.
>>> OR: I am sick and tired of people who lower my self-esteem.
After that, I seek someone is able to consider other think carefully.
>>> After that, I seek someone who is able to consider other\'s thoughts carefully.
Another quality is punctual person, which mean it is the way of respect other and their time.
>>> Another quality is punctuality, which means it is the way of respecting others and their time.
Finally, it’s additional, I prefer someone has a sense of humor.
>>> Finally, it’s an additional, I prefer someone who has a sense of humor.
Whenever we face the hardship, I think humor is able to power to overcome.
>>> Whenever we face hardship, I think humor enables us to overcome it.
This is reason why I consider these qualities to make friends.
>>> This is the reason why I consider these qualities when making friends.
Even though I might not find those persons, I try my best to be the person.
>>> OR: Even though I might not find those persons, I try my best to be that person.
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