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2019-08-23 · 첨삭 강사 Jeny

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ESSAY: What kinds of jobs interest you most and least? To be a landlord is the most interest job people wish to be. They do not need to work hard since they receive money from tenants monthly. Furthermore, the value of land has never been decreased in the past. It means the land price might be increased more and more even it is a bit. And the owner will be able to increase monthly rent fee. How come it can not be interested to the other people. It is the best ideal job ever. To do dirty, difficult, dangerous job is the least interested in. These are not only relevant to me but also the others. For me, if I have to choose the most among three things, it must be dirty job. I can\'t stand with disgusting, and smelly things. Thus, I had avoided to apply a job which made me to work in sewage treatment plant. But, if it gives me a huge salary more than trice of amount the price that I receive now, why not, should I hesitate changing it.

강사 첨삭

Hello there,

It is okay! no worries, I want you to talk more because it means your confident. That\'s a good thing.

I am looking for to talk with you. I do hope that we can both do other best in improving your skills in English.

Determination and perseverance move the world; thinking that others will do it for you is a sure way to fail. Determination is one of the key factors of improving your ability to speak and understand a conversation. In spite of difficulties, it could help you know your strength and weaknesses. 

T. Jeny


ESSAY: What kinds of jobs interest you most and least?
>>correct
To be a landlord is the most interest job people wish to be.

>>The most interesting job is being a landlord.
 They do not need to work hard since they receive money from tenants monthly.

>>They do not need to work hard since they will receive money from  their tenants monthly.

Furthermore, the value of land has never been decreased in the past.

>>Furthermore, the value of land has never been decreased for a long time.
 It means the land price might be increased more and more even it is a bit.

>>It means the prices of land might increase even just a bit/ even for a just small amount.
 And the owner will be able to increase monthly rent fee.

>> And the owner can increase their monthly rental fee.
 How come it can not be interested to the other people. It is the best ideal job ever.
>>
How come it can\'t be interesting to other people? It is the best ideal job ever.
To do dirty, difficult, dangerous job is the least interested in.

>>To do dirty, difficult and dangerous job is the least interesting job.
 These are not only relevant to me but also the others.

>>These are irrelevant to me but to others as well.
 For me, if I have to choose the most among three things, it must be dirty job.

>>If I have to choose among the three, it would be dirty.
 I can\'t stand with disgusting, and smelly things.

>>I can\'t stand disgusting and smelly things.

Thus, I had avoided to apply a job which made me to work in sewage treatment plant.

>>Thus, I had avoided applying a job which would make work at the sewage treatment plant. 
 But, if it gives me a huge salary more than trice of amount the price that I receive now, why not, should I hesitate changing it.

>>But if they will give me a huge salary like three times more than I receive now, why not. I shouldn\'t hesitate to get it.


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