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Hello there,
It is okay! no worries, I want you to talk more because it means your confident. That\'s a good thing.
I am looking for to talk with you. I do hope that we can both do other best in improving your skills in English.
Determination and perseverance move the world; thinking that others will do it for you is a sure way to fail. Determination is one of the key factors of improving your ability to speak and understand a conversation. In spite of difficulties, it could help you know your strength and weaknesses.
T. Jeny
ESSAY: What kinds of jobs interest you most and least?
>>correct
To be a landlord is the most interest job people wish to be.
>>The most interesting job is being a landlord.
They do not need to work hard since they receive money from tenants monthly.
>>They do not need to work hard since they will receive money from their tenants monthly.
Furthermore, the value of land has never been decreased in the past.
>>Furthermore, the value of land has never been decreased for a long time.
It means the land price might be increased more and more even it is a bit.
>>It means the prices of land might increase even just a bit/ even for a just small amount.
And the owner will be able to increase monthly rent fee.
>> And the owner can increase their monthly rental fee.
How come it can not be interested to the other people. It is the best ideal job ever.
>>How come it can\'t be interesting to other people? It is the best ideal job ever.
To do dirty, difficult, dangerous job is the least interested in.
>>To do dirty, difficult and dangerous job is the least interesting job.
These are not only relevant to me but also the others.
>>These are irrelevant to me but to others as well.
For me, if I have to choose the most among three things, it must be dirty job.
>>If I have to choose among the three, it would be dirty.
I can\'t stand with disgusting, and smelly things.
>>I can\'t stand disgusting and smelly things.
Thus, I had avoided to apply a job which made me to work in sewage treatment plant.
>>Thus, I had avoided applying a job which would make work at the sewage treatment plant.
But, if it gives me a huge salary more than trice of amount the price that I receive now, why not, should I hesitate changing it.
>>But if they will give me a huge salary like three times more than I receive now, why not. I shouldn\'t hesitate to get it.
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