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2019-08-26 · 첨삭 강사 Vance

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HOMEWORK: Who is the most annoying celebrity? Why? Its seong-li that one of the idol member of Big-bang. He opened his own club called bunning-sun 2or 3 years ago. At first, It is very popular for everyone known. Passing the time, He gave lots of money and wealth and celebration. So he boosted his value. After that He made another company which made Japanese-Restaurant. However, The prosecution of teams invaded his club and check the situation. Result of checking, There is a drug, and exchanging black money. Finally, He must be gone jail and retried entertainment market.

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Its seong-li that one of the idol member of Big-bang.

>>It\'s Seong-li the one idol and a member of Big-bang.

He opened his own club called bunning-sun 2 or 3 years ago.

>>2 to 3 years ago he opened his own club called bunning-sun.

At first, It is very popular for everyone known.

>>At first, it is very popular, everyone knows about them.

Passing the time, He gave lots of money and wealth and celebration.

>> As time passed by, he gain lots of money, wealth and popularity

So he boosted his value. After that He made another company which made Japanese-Restaurant.

>>So he boosted his value. After that he made opened another business which is a Japanese-Restaurant.

However, The prosecution of teams invaded his club and check the situation.

>>However, a team prosecutors invaded his club and checked the situation.

Result of checking, There is a drug, and exchanging black money.

>>The results of the bust, there were drugs, and exchanging black money.

Finally, He must be gone jail and retried entertainment market.

>>Finally, he went to jail and retried from the entertainment industry.

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