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2019-08-27 · 첨삭 강사 Mayleen

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I think rice is a better staple food than bread because rice is much healthier than bread. Bread is made of flour, so it is greasy and high in calories. However, rice is less greasy because it has a lot of fiber. As a result, westerners who use bread as a staple have more obesity people than Asians. For this reason, I think rice is more suitable for staple food.

강사 첨삭

Hello there, Lily! ^-^ Happy Tuesday!

You gave a very good comparison between rice and bread.

You also talked about the effect of having bread as a staple food in western countries.

Overall, you did a very good job here!^^

I\'ll talk to you later.


_T. Mayleen :)


I think rice is a better staple food than bread because rice is much healthier than bread.

>>> I think rice is a better staple food because rice is much healthier than bread.

Bread is made of flour, so it is greasy and high in calories.

>>> CORRECT

However, rice is less greasy because it has a lot of fiber.

>>> CORRECT

>>> OR: Rice isn\'t greasy and is rich in fiber.

As a result, westerners who use bread as a staple have more obesity people than Asians.

>>> As a result, westerners who use bread as a staple food have more cases of obesity than Asians.

For this reason, I think rice is more suitable for staple food.

>>> For this reason, I think rice is a more suitable staple food.

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