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학생이 쓴 원문
강사 첨삭
Hello there, Lily! ^-^ Happy Tuesday!
You gave a very good comparison between rice and bread.
You also talked about the effect of having bread as a staple food in western countries.
Overall, you did a very good job here!^^
I\'ll talk to you later.
_T. Mayleen :)
I think rice is a better staple food than bread because rice is much healthier than bread.
>>> I think rice is a better staple food because rice is much healthier than bread.
Bread is made of flour, so it is greasy and high in calories.
>>> CORRECT
However, rice is less greasy because it has a lot of fiber.
>>> CORRECT
>>> OR: Rice isn\'t greasy and is rich in fiber.
As a result, westerners who use bread as a staple have more obesity people than Asians.
>>> As a result, westerners who use bread as a staple food have more cases of obesity than Asians.
For this reason, I think rice is more suitable for staple food.
>>> For this reason, I think rice is a more suitable staple food.
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