homework
학생이 쓴 원문
-Over the last few decades, the media has promoted the image of young thin women as being ideal. What problem has this caused?- (^-^)
Most women are suffered from losing their weight whol life.
I am a skinny woman but I also worried if I gain my weight.
If I feel I get my weight, I try to be carful what I eat.
I have no idea when women start wanting to be thin and skinny.
As I know, Hawaii and Newzealand Maori people think that the fatter the more beautiful.
Even those country women are also trying to lose their weight recently.
Losing weight is hard working and needs lots of patient.
Let\'s enjoy eating and throw away thinking about the weight!
강사 첨삭
Hi [이름]! Thank you for your homework. I appreciate it! ^ ^
I don\'t know about the being really skinny and underweight is the idea of beauty. But for me, I\'m trying to loose weight for health reasons. I don\'t want to be a burden to my children as I get old. That\'s why I\'m trying to exercise everyday and watch what I eat. ^^ But of course, I do have cheat days, especially on weekends, I eat what I want and as much as I want to! ^ ^
-Teacher Jedah
>>Most women suffer so much with loosing weight their whole lives.
I am a skinny woman but I also worried if I gain my weight.
I am a skinny woman but I also worried if I gain my weight.
>>I am a skinny woman but I am also worried if I gain weight.
If I feel I get my weight, I try to be carful what I eat.
If I feel I get my weight, I try to be carful what I eat.
>>If I feel like I\'m gaining weight, I try to be careful with the food I eat.
I have no idea when women start wanting to be thin and skinny.
I have no idea when women start wanting to be thin and skinny.
>>I have no idea when did women start wanting to be thin and skinny.
As I know, Hawaii and Newzealand Maori people think that the fatter the more beautiful.
As I know, Hawaii and Newzealand Maori people think that the fatter the more beautiful.
>>As I know, Hawaii and New Zealand Maori people think that the fatter the more beautiful.
Even those country women are also trying to lose their weight recently.
Even those country women are also trying to lose their weight recently.
>>CORRECT
Losing weight is hard working and needs lots of patient.
Losing weight is hard working and needs lots of patient.
>>Loosing weight is hard work and requires a lot of patience.
Let\'s enjoy eating and throw away thinking about the weight!
Let\'s enjoy eating and throw away thinking about the weight!
>>Let\'s enjoy eating and forget about the thought of loosing weight! ^ ^
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