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HOMEWORK: What kind of problems do poor people have, and how are they going to selve them?
First, Government have to build shelter for poor people.
Too less amounts of Korea shelter is exist, We should be increasing these number.
Korea also one of the different economy equality country in the world.
Some area is wealth but another area is poor and standing just a one day.
Korea government have to suggest for poor people that make people alive.
Giving job for them is a good method to improving their economy.
I think that Almost Korea congressman was been corrupted so they can\'t handle anything.
How bout changing thinking about that Not only focusing earn their profit but also helping community?
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Thank you for doing your homework. ^^
>>First, The government have to build shelters for poor people.
Too less amounts of Korea shelter is exist, We should be increasing these number.
>>A few amounts of Korean shelters is exist, We should be increasing these numbers.
Korea also one of the different economy equality country in the world.
>>Korea has a different economy equality country in the world.
Some area is wealth but another area is poor and standing just a one day.
>>Some areas are wealthy but another area is poor.
Korea government have to suggest for poor people that make people alive.
>>Korean government have to help poor people to live.
Giving job for them is a good method to improving their economy.
>>Giving them some jobs is a good method to improve their economy.
I think that Almost Korea congressman was been corrupted so they can\'t handle anything.
>>I think that almost Korea\'s congressmen is corrupt so they can\'t handle anything.
How bout changing thinking about that Not only focusing earn their profit but also helping community?
>>How about changing the way we think, not only focusing on earning some profits but also helping community?
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