homework
학생이 쓴 원문
-Should a conflict be solved straightaway or when we calm down?- (^-^)
Wise people say,\" When you fight or argue with someone, take a deep breath and count 1,2,3\"
But In real, It is so difficult. we usually speak and shout without thinking with willing to win in this fighting round.
I think when we conflict, It is better to solve when we calm down.
During the conflict, we are very sensitive so, It is very difficult to be rational.
After the conflict , we usually think that we were so rude and we hurted the other.
Also we admit that we were wrong in anyway.
But when we try to solve the conflict at that moment, It can make worse because we are upset.
Hi Jedah!
I am trying to do my homework before I leave my office.
I hope that you have a good trip!
Take care and see you on Monday!
Happy Chusuk!!!
강사 첨삭
Hi [이름]! Thank you for trying to do your homework! ^ ^ I appreciate it a lot! ^ ^
Good thoughts on this one. Yes, we have to take a deep breath, relax and as much as we can, we must control our emotions. Like I have said, \"learn to respond and not react\"! ^ ^
-Teacher Jedah
Wise people say,\" When you fight or argue with someone, take a deep breath and count 1,2,3\"
>>CORRECT
But In real, It is so difficult.
But In real, It is so difficult.
>>But in reality, it is actually difficult to do.
we usually speak and shout without thinking with willing to win in this fighting round.
>>We usually speak and shout without thinking and we just focus on winning the argument.
I think when we conflict, It is better to solve when we calm down.
I think when we conflict, It is better to solve when we calm down.
>>I think when conflict arises, it is better to resolve it when we have calmed down.
During the conflict, we are very sensitive so, It is very difficult to be rational.
During the conflict, we are very sensitive so, It is very difficult to be rational.
>>CORRECT
After the conflict , we usually think that we were so rude and we hurted the other.
After the conflict , we usually think that we were so rude and we hurted the other.
>>After the conflict, we would usually realize that we have been rude and have hurt each other\'s feelings.
Also we admit that we were wrong in anyway.
Also we admit that we were wrong in anyway.
>>CORRECT
But when we try to solve the conflict at that moment, It can make worse because we are upset.
But when we try to solve the conflict at that moment, It can make worse because we are upset.
>>But trying to solve the conflict while we are upset can make the situation worse.
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