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2019-09-24 · 첨삭 강사 Lucy

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1. What do you think would be the most appropriate age to retire? 2. What do you think of the idea that people should be obliged to retire at earlier ages so that younger people have more job opportunities? I think pension system is more important than age. If the company or the government operate pension properly, it dosen\'t matter when people retire. I want to reitre at any moment but I can\'t. I hope the retirement age becomes earlier. As time pass, my eye sight and my body conditions are getting worse and worse. I\'m afraid of aging. It will be difficult to work as I get older. If pension company worked well, I could retire.....

강사 첨삭

Thank you [이름]!


The government gives pension though it\'s not enough. Nonetheless, if you have an investment for your future pension in a private sector, then well and good. But there\'s a catch, you need be partner with company that will stand for centuries. :)


~Teacher Lucy


I think pension system is more important than age.

>>CORRECT!

>>Pension system is more important than the age.


 If the company or the government operate pension properly, it dosen\'t matter when people retire.

>>If the company or the government operates pension properly, it dosen\'t matter when people will retire.


 I want to retire at any moment but I can\'t.

>>CORRECT!

>>I would love to retire anytime but I still can\'t.


 I hope the retirement age becomes earlier.

>>I hope the retirement age becomes lower. 


 As time passes, my eye sight and my body conditions are getting worse and worse.

>>CORRECT!

>>As time passes by, I\'m having poor eye sight and worsening body condition.


 I\'m afraid of aging.

>>CORRECT!

>>I\'m afraid of getting older.


It will be difficult to work as I get older.

>>CORRECT!

>>As I get older, it becomes harder.


 If pension company worked well, I could retire.....

>>CORRECT!

>>I could retire any moment as long as the pension company works well.

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