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The world is changing very quickly. As like this topic, we also lose our traditional culture and improve all of our life. Despite this, keeping traditional is very important to our future. Because If we forgot our past, we wouldn\'t make our future well. All of our present made by past. We should keep our culture and history and then, make more achived future from present and past.
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Wonderful thoughts you have here Jay! Thank you for sharing. I appreciate it! ^^
Knowledge, traditions, language scripts, dress codes, etc. are some of the cultural traits that are unique to a particular region`s culture. Culture is important to us because it defines our evolutionary identity. Culture helps us understand our ancestral values and gives us the very meaning of life. ^ ^
-Teacher Jedah
The world is changing very quickly.
>>CORRECT or
>>The world is changing rapidly.
As like this topic, we also lose our traditional culture and improve all of our life.
>>As like this topic, as we lose our traditional culture, we improve our lives.
Despite this, keeping traditional is very important to our future.
>>Despite this, keeping traditions (or, keeping our traditional ways) is very important to our future.
Because If we forgot our past, we wouldn\'t make our future well.
>>Because if we forget our past, we wouldn\'t make our future well. (or, we wouldn\'t create a better future)
All of our present made by past.
>>All our present is made by our past.
We should keep our culture and history and then, make more achived future from present and past.
>>We should keep our culture and history so we can achieve more in the future based on our present and past.
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