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2019-09-30 · 첨삭 강사 Annie

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How do you welcome someone on your neighborhood? Aside from giving food, what else do you tell or show them? About 10 years ago, most people in Korea including me often invited neighbors at home to welcome. And we had fun time together with having a conversation, eating food and drinking coffee. While, in these days, there are rarely to do so. Instead, we go to the restaurant or coffee shop. I think, with increasing of individualism, a way that people invite a neighbors is changing. In past, people used word \"our\" , but now, use word \"I\" a lot.

강사 첨삭

Hello Bella ,

Thank you for taking time to answer this question. It only proves that you really wanted to improve in your English skill. Keep up the good work!

Sincerely,

Teacher Annie (^^)

>>>About 10 years ago, most people in Korea including me usually invites our neighbor to our house as a way to welcome them in the neighborhood.

And we had fun time together with having a conversation, eating food and drinking coffee.

>>>We usually have fun having a conversation, eating food and drinking coffee all together.

While, in these days, there are rarely to do so. Instead, we go to the restaurant or coffee shop.

>>>While these days, it is very rare to invite a neighbor in your house. Instead, we choose to go to the restaurant or cafe to talk.

I think, with increasing of individualism, a way that people invite a neighbors is changing.

>>>I think with the increase of individualism of each person, the way we welcome our neighbors is also changing. In addition, a lot of people are so busy to even invite their neighbors.

In past, people used word \"our\" , but now, use word \"I\" a lot.

>>>In the past, people used the word; \"our\" but now we focus on the word \"I\". We became too self centered.

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