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What are drawbacks of living in apartments?
Living in apartments is convenient. But living in apartments is individual more than living in a general house. People think that their own privacy is very important. That\'s right. But I think good heart-to-heart relationship is also important for living in earth. That is way I sometimes have a time that I want to move in a general house. So I sometimes discussed with my husband to move in to general house ares.
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Teacher Annie
What are drawbacks of living in apartments?
Living in apartments is convenient.
Living in apartments is convenient.
>>>CORRECT
OR: It\'s convenient to live in an apartment.
But living in apartments is individual more than living in a general house.
>>>But living in an apartment is only for single people who wants his/her privacy.
Living in a real house needs a family for it to be called a home.
People think that their own privacy is very important.
>>>CORRECT
That\'s right. But I think good heart-to-heart relationship is also important for living in earth.
>>>That\'s right but I think a good and real relationship between families and neighbors are more important to be able to live in this earth.
That is way I sometimes have a time that I want to move in a general house.
>>>That is the reason why I sometimes want to move in a real house not in an apartment.
So I sometimes discussed with my husband to move in to general house ares.
>>>So I sometimes discuss moving in a real house to my husband.
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