Homework
학생이 쓴 원문
maybe, kissing would be very annoying . it\'s very hard to understand in korean culture. we are edeuced based on confusianism.
so it\'s very hard work for introvert people just to meet a person. they are very akward in first meeting. so if they are in the kissing culture
they would be very reluctant to meet people. then he would be antisocial. i think it\'s a little extreme case. but most of koreans will not welcome kissing in their first meeting.
강사 첨삭
Hello Jay!
Thank you for doing your homework tonight! You did great in expressing yourself through writing. You were able to express your thoughts and ideas well because you gave a lot of points and arguments in this topic. Great job!
Just be careful in your sentences. Don\'t forget when to capitalize the first letter of the word.
Also, be careful in using punctuation marks in your sentences.
Until the next one! :)
so it\'s very hard work for introvert people just to meet a person.
maybe, kissing would be very annoying .
>>Maybe, kissing would be very annoying.
it\'s very hard to understand in korean culture.
>>It\'s very hard to understand in Korean culture.
we are edeuced based on confusianism.
>>We are educated based on Confucianism.
so it\'s very hard work for introvert people just to meet a person.
>>So, it\'s a very hard work for introvert people to just meet a person.
they are very akward in first meeting.
>>They feel awkward in the first meeting.
so if they are in the kissing culture they would be very reluctant to meet people.
>>So, if they are exposed to the kissing culture, they would be very reluctant to meet other people.
then he would be antisocial.
>>Then, he would be antisocial.
i think it\'s a little extreme case. but most of koreans will not welcome kissing in their first meeting.
>>I think, it\'s a little extreme case, but most of Koreans will not welcome kissing in their first meeting.
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