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What are the advantages of listening to music?
Listening to music has many advantages. First, the music help to learn languages. Babies learn of mother-languages through listen songs.
Second, Listening to music help to take cure in mentally. It give to comfort and healing. So many athletes listen to music before match.
At last listening to music is really need in our person.
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Hi [이름]!
This composition is a bit clearer than the others.
You have chosen your expressions well.
Keep it up!^^
~~ Teacher Sharon
Listening to music has many advantages.
>> Correct
First, the music help to learn languages.
>> First, music helps people in learning languages.
Babies learn of mother-languages through listen songs.
>> Babies learn their mother\'s language through listening to songs.
Second, Listening to music help to take cure in mentally.
Second, Listening to music help to take cure in mentally.
>> Second, listening to music helps us maintain our mental health.
It give to comfort and healing.
>> It gives comfort and healing.
So many athletes listen to music before match.
>> So many athletes listen to music before matches.
At last listening to music is really need in our person.
At last listening to music is really need in our person.
>> Finally, listening to music is something that people need.
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