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2019-10-16 · 첨삭 강사 Sharon

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What in your life would you not change? I will not change In My life about 3 things. First it is diligent. Diligence most important in my life. This is because my motto is diligent people is not poor. The Second is Modesty, I think modesty can be a shield to other people in life. Finally is Passion. The passion is power that can be to do anything. And I believe that hardship can to overcome to passion.

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Hi [이름]!
I can see deep thought in this composition.
I appreciate the effort you put into this work.
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Please continue practicing.^^
~~ Teacher Sharon
I will not change In My life about 3 things.
>> There are three things in my life that I won\'t change.
First it is diligent. 
>> First, it\'s my diligence.
Diligence most important in my life.
>> Diligence is the most important thing in my life.
This is because my motto is diligent people is not poor.
>> This is because my motto is \"Diligent people are not poor.\"
The Second is Modesty, 
>> The second is my modesty.
I think modesty can be a shield to other people in life. 
>> I think modesty can be a shield against other people in life. 
Finally is Passion. 
>> Finally, it\'s my passion.
The passion is power that can be to do anything. 
>> Passion gives you power to do anything.
And I believe that hardship can to overcome to passion.
>> I believe that hardship can never defeat passion. 

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