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2019-10-16 · 첨삭 강사 Jane

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HOMEWORK: What positive effects does your work have on your life? Discuss in 3 to 5 sentences. Although I quit my job a few month ago, I think my work is needed in my life. Working make me feel achivement, self confidence and self respectancy. Besides, I can have social relation ship and financial benefit. So, I am finding new job. Frankling speaking, getting a new job is not so simple. At first, I am thinking what I want to do in the future, when I am happy... And I am trying to do new things I am interested.

강사 첨삭

Hello, Serena. Thank you for expressing your thoughts through writing. I really appreciate it. Keep it up and I look forward to reading more of your work. Have a good one and I\'ll see you again on Friday. ~ teacher Jane ^___^


Although I quit my job a few month ago, I think my work is needed in my life. 
>>> Although I quit my job a few months ago, I think my work is needed/ necessary in my life. 

Working make me feel achivement, self confidence and self respectancy.
>>> Working gives me a sense of achievement, self-confidence, and self-respect. 

Besides, I can have social relation ship and financial benefit.
>>> Besides, I can have social relations and financial benefits. 

So, I am finding new job. 
>>> So I\'m looking for a new job. 

Frankling speaking, getting a new job is not so simple.
>>> Frankly speaking, getting a new job is not so simple. 

At first, I am thinking what I want to do in the future, when I am happy...
>>> At first, I was thinking about what I wanted to do in the future, about what would make me happy. 

And I am trying to do new things I am interested. 
>>> And I am trying to do new things I am interested in. 

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