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학생이 쓴 원문
In my coutry, To enroll famous university is very important. It\'s because major company\'s CEOs want this.So,We have to study very hard in highscool to go good universty. I think There is an invisible glass ceiling that normal people can\'t break.So, Only people who graduate in major universty can go to major companis. Future job depends on how good universty i graduate. So, Korea students study very hard in high school to go to good universty.
강사 첨삭
Hello Jay! I can picture the image because of your effective way of telling a story through writing. You are good in writing your ideas. Keep up the great work!
See you in class!
Until the next one! :)
~Teacher Sheila
>>In my country, to enroll in a famous university is very important.
OR>>In my country, enrolling in a famous university is very important.
It\'s because major company\'s CEOs want this.
>>It\'s because major companies CEO\'s want this.
OR>>It\'s because big companies CEO\'s want this.
So,We have to study very hard in highscool to go good universty.
>>So, we have to study very hard in high school to go to a good university.
I think There is an invisible glass ceiling that normal people can\'t break.
>>I think, there is an invisible glass ceiling that normal people can\'t break.
So, Only people who graduate in major universty can go to major companis.
>>So, only people who graduate in major universities can go to major companies.
Future job depends on how good universty i graduate.
>>The future job depends on how good the university where I graduated from.
So, Korea students study very hard in high school to go to good universty.
>>So, Korean students study very hard in high school to go to a good university.
OR>>So, Korean students study very hard in high school to go a prestigious university.
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