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2019-10-17 · 첨삭 강사 Vance

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HOMEWORK: Do men and women spend their free time differently? How? I think that it is similar to spend their free time who is man or women. In my case, i spent the time to doing workout and hanging with my friends. Also, I like exercising and reading books, Almost my friends like playing soccer and playing the computer game. My friends who is women, I think that they like going to cafe or department store. They like taking with friends and have very positive thinking. I respect their activity when they have free time, also I wish to find more interesting good habit.

강사 첨삭

Thank you for doing your homework. ^^

 think that it is similar to spend their free time who is man or women.
>>think men and women are similar when it comes to spending their free time. 

In my case, i spent the time to doing workout and hanging with my friends.
>>In my case, I spend my time doing some workout routines and hanging out with my friends.

Also, I like exercising and reading books, Almost my friends like playing soccer and playing the computer game.
>>Also, I like exercising and reading books, almost all of my friends like playing soccer and playing computer games.

My friends who is women, I think that they like going to cafe or department store.
they like taking with friends and have very positive thinking.
>>My friends who are women, like going to the cafe or department stores.

They like taking with friends and have very positive thinking.
>>They like talking with their friends and they have a very positive thinking.

I respect their activity when they have free time, also I wish to find more interesting good habit.
>>
I respect their activity when they have free time, I also wish to find more interesting good habits.


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