Homework
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Writing Task: What do you think is the importance of friendships? Discuss it in 3-5 sentences.
I think friendships is very importatnt for people\'s mental health. It takes a lot of parts in mental health. It can make people feel that they are belong to somewhere and feel bonds. And I think When I was in hard time, There were my friends to hear my worries and encourage me. It helped me a lot. I could overcome slump with my friends. and I did the same If my friends were in that situation. We can depend on each other. So, It is very importatnt for people to build friendships.
강사 첨삭
Hello there Jay! I always look forward to your homework because you provide details in your answers. Keep it up!
Until the next one!
~Teacher Sheila
>>I think friendship is very important for people\'s mental health.
It takes a lot of parts in mental health.
>>CORRECT
OR>>It covers a lot of parts in mental health.
It can make people feel that they are belong to somewhere and feel bonds.
>>It can make people feel that they belong somewhere and feel the bond.
And I think When I was in hard time, There were my friends to hear my worries and encourage me.
>>And I think when I was in a hard time, my friends were there to hear my worries and they encouraged me.
It helped me a lot.
>>CORRECT
I could overcome slump with my friends. and I did the same If my friends were in that situation.
>>I could overcome slumps with my friends and I will do the same if my friends are in that situation.
OR>>I could overcome hardships with my friends and I will do the same if my friends are in that situation.
We can depend on each other.
>>CORRECT
So, It is very importatnt for people to build friendships.
>>So, it is very important for people to build friendships.
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