Homework
학생이 쓴 원문
: If you could change any aspect of your personality, what would it be
I want to be more outgoing.When i was young, I was a more shy boy than now. I have been outgoing since i became an adult. It has a lot of advantages if a person is outgoing. First, I could meet a lot of people. Then, I could learn from people and feel bonds. Second, I\'ve became more confiedent than before. To eat alone was very hard for the old day\'s me. I can eat food in a restaurant without caring other people. I think I\'m still introvert person.But If i become more sociable, It would be more advanges for me to live out rest life.
강사 첨삭
Hello Jay! Your homework is good today. Your sentences are getting better and better each day! You just committed minor lapses. Keep it up!
Until the next one! ^-^
See you in class!
~Teacher Sheila
>>CORRECT
When i was young, I was a more shy boy than now.
>>When I was young, I was more of a shy boy than now.
OR>>When I was young, I was more of a shy boy compared now.
I have been outgoing since i became an adult.
>>I have been outgoing since I became an adult.
It has a lot of advantages if a person is outgoing.
>>CORRECT
First, I could meet a lot of people.
>>CORRECT
Then, I could learn from people and feel bonds.
>>Then, I could learn from people and feel bonded.
OR>>Then I could learn from people and feel the bond.
Second, I\'ve became more confiedent than before.
>>Second, I\'ve become more confident than before.
To eat alone was very hard for the old day\'s me.
>>To eat alone was very hard for the old me.
OR>>Eating alone was very hard during the old me.
I can eat food in a restaurant without caring other people.
>>CORRECT
OR>>I can eat food in a restaurant without minding other people.
I think I\'m still introvert person.
>>I think I\'m still an introvert person.
But If i become more sociable, It would be more advanges for me to live out rest life.
>>But if I become more sociable, it would be more of my advantage living for the rest of my life.
OR>>But if I become more sociable, it would be more advantageous for me to live for rest of my life.
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